every wednesday madison woods posts a picture prompt to challenge writers to create a 100-word story or poem or anything that works for you. then post your work on your blog. additionally, on friday, you go back to her site and post a link to your blog entry in the comments on her friday fictioneers post.
i’m going to try to keep up with this, as should you. give it a shot. i prefer to stick to 100 words, but she doesn’t mind either way. not everyone has an hour and a half like i had this morning to sit and write, revise, edit, revise, edit, etc. until getting it down to 100 and telling everything you want to tell.
here’s this week’s picture. if you don’t want to read my entry or be influenced by what i wrote, then don’t scroll beyond the picture. until friday.
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Heather reluctantly pulled her lips away, breathing heavily, chest pounding, his too. When John reached for her belt this time, she smiled. Back arched, she lifted her ass off the blanket covering the dirty, plywood floor. He tugged her jeans away, stood, removed his own. His ache was obvious, ready. He crawled up to kiss again. Her legs wrapped, pulled him against her. Warm and perfect.
“This so beats Algebra,” she groaned. “You’re brilliant.”
“Me? I just followed the map you put in my locker.”
“What map?” Ready lips fell silent. Eyes widened, then twitched.
Footsteps, coming up the stairs.
(100 words)
Thanksa bunch
Bunch of thanks or bunch of roses?
both!
youth – bunch of hopes and dreams
life… dead hopes… lost dreams
young years – roses
present… thorns
all that and a bag of chips.
a bag of chips and some falling stars… a ham sandwich, the sea and a distant campfire…
and even more distant the barking of a dog running again with the same woman on the same beach…
at sunrise
Love the twist ending!
that’s what i’m going for. last sentence flips it over. thanks.
Really nice twist at the end.
thanks. that’s what i’m aiming for. good to know i hit it.
Wow. I liked this one a lot. do you mind if I make one suggestion? I think you went one sentence too far. I love the way the character, says What map? and they the eyes twitch. That alone makes me realize there is someone else in the house. I think the last sentence weakens the shock. Just my opinion.
i think you’re right.
you are so amazing Richard..I saw this photo and really thought for an hour still nothing came to my mind…
and now i read your story and am absolutely sure flash fictions are not for me….
How do you come up with these stories…they are just brillant
Brilliant
believe it or not, just found this today. thanks for reading. sorry i didn’t see it sooner.
Love it!
You’ve already done yours? Man, I need some inspiration stat. Great story! The algebra comment gave me a sense of age. Then you dropped the scary twist down on me. Poor kids, maybe algebra would’ve been better. Nice work.
Thanks. You’ll get it done. Love the flips.
usually, when i see the picture, i get something fairly quickly. then the hard part is to scrap it down to say what i want to say in 100 words.
Nice story Rich. The build up was soothing, nostalgic. I think many of us were imagining ourselves in the same place, mabye a memory, perhaps a fantasy. Alone it would have stood. The twist made it really good.
thank you sir. that’s what i was aiming for. twist in the last sentence, although someone pointed out that i didn’t need it. i think they were right, it’s better without it, but i’ll live with it as it is. looking forward to plenty to read tomorrow.
Man, you are good. Now I want to go make out with someone in a shed or something. Haha!
ok, but let’s pick the shed together. no anonymous maps. thanks for the “good.”
Deal. You are very welcome.
oh, by the way, looked at your gravatar/profile thing, and i clicked on whatever the chive thing is at the bottom. interesting. thanks.
Awesome, theChive is a wonderful time vacuum full of laughter, kittens, and boobs. I mostly look at the kittens and wish I worked there.
hmm. i wasn’t looking at kittens. boobs, i can take ‘em or leave ‘em. however…i think i should not continue this discussion here. and you likely don’t want to continue it anyway.
10-4 my friend!
oh, but i really want to continue it. and then i’ll seem like just a typical guy. oh well.
I liked the scary twist!
thanks miss. that’s what i’m going for. last sentence changes things.
It was very good!
and so are you.
I love how you set things up so nicely for this couple, and then did a complete 180 on them. There’s so many different ways you could go from here. Very well done.
Mine can be found at- http://whimsicalquestsofacuriousmind.blogspot.com/2012/05/may-4th-friday-fictioneers-youre-insane.html
Thanks a bunch.
This brilliantly erotic, with a twist full of suspense. Fine piece. Here is mine: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/fridayfictioneers-lost-without-you/
Liked the twist. I want to know whose footsteps are coming closer.
Our link is http://www.lazuli-portals.com/flash-fiction/old-wallpaper
Thanks. Will read yours.
footsteps are probably her ex-boyfriend. or his ex-girlfriend. or…?
this line is magic: breathing heavily, chest pounding, his too.
magic? wow. thanks sir.
Oops. I like the twist at the end very much and it’s so teenage story from hell – ie act first, think later
http://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/05/03/friday-fictioneers-a-wall-to-keep-a-secret/
thanks miss. will see yours soon.
Oops. Those two.
This was really fun and entertaining.
A great take on the prompt.
thanks. in a way, it’s like a teen slasher movie. the kids who run off to have sex are the ones who get killed.
LOL.
Nice twist in a rather different take on the prompt.
Mine is nearly 200 words this week:
http://garybaileywriting.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/175/
i’m about to sit for a loooong time and read everyone else’s. thanks.
This is what you call being set up. It’s all going downhill from here, I think. Nice twist.
http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/dysfunctional-friday-fictioneers-may-2012/
Loved the ending! The beginning wasn’t too bad either. Sounds like a good starting point for a slasher movie.
http://authorbrandonscott.wordpress.com/
i didn’t think about that until after – yeah – slasher movie.
Bloody freakin’ brilliant! Mouth dropped in scandal and everything!!
For other commenters: http://kaitlinandmichaelbranch.com/2012/05/04/friday-fictioneers/
aww thanks miss. very kind of you.
Hello, thankfully I’m back. The last sentence can be an another prompt for a good short story. Nicely done.
thanks a bunch. welcome back.
Enjoyed this. I liked the twist at the end-like to know what happened next
thanks. twist at the end is what i’m hoping for.
I always love to read your writing…intense, lustful, perplexing, a twist…good read.
Here is mine: http://integrativethought.wordpress.com
thanks a bunch. lustful and perplexing. i like the sound of that. i may have read yours already, but i’ll check again.
Full of erotic atmosphere, tinged with nostalgia and, at the close, uncertainty and fear. Perfectly balanced and well written
much appreciated.
Ah, young romance, just follow the map. Great twist at the end.
Here’s mine:http://teschoenborn.com/2012/05/03/friday-fictioneers-the-gig/
I can hear the ominous music and the held breaths!
Were they lured for a nefarious reason?
Here’s mine http://createrealitylivelife.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/friday-flash-fiction/
definitely nefarious reasons. i will read yours.
Excellent twist at the end.
Here’s mine
http://tollykitsjourney.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/old-wallpaper-for-fridayfictioneers-flashfiction
Hi RIch,
One of the best I’ve read this morning. (Janet’s right though. The impact would have been as great and the fear it elicited would have struck deep into the hearts of your panting readers. All in all about a 97 on the Tomatometer. Well done.
Aloha,
Doug
P.S. Thanks for reading mine. This link is a non-anonymous map to your readers. Trying to blow some of them away with my story, if you get my drift. Thanks, D.
http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/the-nerve/
well that’s a fabulous thing for you to say. thanks. and yes, janet is right. last week someone suggested an edit, and i changed it right away, but this time i left it anyway even though she was right.
It’s all subjective, I know. Your story was so good that it doesn’t matter. Nuance and lighting, but sometimes they add to the overall effect. (I changed bitch to witch after reading several comments, realizing it added one more thread to the warp and woof of Ozbique references in mine.) Your stuff is consistently good, my friend. it’s a pleasure to step into your worlds every Friday.
A hui hou,
D.
quite another nice thing to say. i’m flattered. great way to end the week. or start the weekend.
A great story Rich.
Loved that double twist at the end – fist the map, what map & then the footsteps on the stairs. Great.
thank you sir. much appreciated.
Oh Yeah… I thought I had fallen into a romance novel for a sec… last line was a bitch.
yup. thanks.
Holy cats, talk about an unexpected twist! EEEE! Nicely done.
And here’s mine: http://notforallmarkets.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/the-beholder/
Awesome, its got it all, sex, intrigue, a nice twist and the threat of horror…amazing work for so few words
Here’s mine:http://theequiaticbind.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/friday-fictioneers-wallace/
thanks. i remember yours. poor wallace.
Great story here, I love the passion you depict and then the sudden twist as they realise there’s been a mistake. I agree with one or two above – the last line doesn’t add anything for me. The twist is perfect in “what map” and their physical reaction.
yup. thanks for reading it.
Uh-oh. I loved the way you brought about the pause when both of them realized something just wasn’t quite right about that map deal. Great story!
Thanks miss. You started it.