#fridayfictioneers via rochelle – 12/21

Every Wednesday Ralphie Wisoff-Fields posts a picture prompt to challenge writers to create a 100-word story or poem or anything that works for you.  After you post your work on your blog,  go back to her site and post a link to your blog entry on her Friday Fictioneers post.  Place.  Page.

I could not add revisions this week because I had too many things to do today and didn’t have the time to color-code and underline and such.  I wasn’t even sure if i would even write this until late tonight or tomorrow morning.  For those who liked the revisions, sorry.  For those who did not like it, Happy Holidays.

I’m going to try to keep up with this, as should you.  Give it a shot.  I prefer to stick to 100 words, but she doesn’t mind either way.  Not everyone has the time to sit and write, revise, edit, revise, edit, etc. until getting it down to 100 and telling everything you want to tell.

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Midnight

Neither moved.

One knew the other.

One – a mysterious, great beast.

Both calculated in milliseconds.

“If I move…”

“What if he tries…?”

Cat – fangs, silent speed.

Beast – far slower, but massive, stronger.

Both – fur, claws.

Both – eyes they’d remember, next time.

Both – determined to reach morning.

Only one absolutely had to get past the other.

Beast slowly extended his arm.

Cat hissed, tail tucked, ears pinned, feet planted, ready.

Cat squinted, focused.

The great beast’s gentle paw, Claus revealed, stroked cat’s head, spine.  Flashing an Elfin smile, the great beast moved past and began his jolly work.

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100 words

87 thoughts on “#fridayfictioneers via rochelle – 12/21

      • The softer, lighter side. I was really thinking of Fictioneers writing. As far as the rise and fall writing, I don’t like seeing it merely because I don’t like knowing you and your family had to live through all that.

      • aww, that’s nice, thanks. and yeah, about the FF stuff, in the beginning i was heavy on horror-style things. but i decided to tune the december ones into a christmas/winter holiday theme. thanks for noticing.

  1. Hi Rich,
    Considering the date and the photo, a Christmas story is de riguer. Santa is a beast, a beast of burden. You kept me guessing, though, thinking it was some kind of hostile encounter, until the sweetly happy ending. Hope you holidays are festive and fun. Ron

    • Thanks. I just took the liberty to describe Santa as a beast because that’s how he might seem from the cats point of view. But I did not write it from the cats point of view. Maybe I should have.

      Happy Holidays to you and yours as well. And cats.

  2. In the first few lines I was worried Santa might not make an apperance this time. Thank you for not dissapointing. This fits the story my daughter has had me reading almost every night. Fabulously fun! Great work, Rich.

    • i tend to enjoy writing darker things, and when i started this piece, it was supposed to be dark, but then something just changed as i was writing it. a few people have mentioned that they liked something less dark from me.

      but the idea that you have are “expecting” something from me is very nice. it suggests you know where to find something you like. thanks very much.

  3. Dear Rich,

    Whenever I read your stories I relax and go with the flow and never am I disappointed. Mark of a great storyteller. Can say no more for it would be redundant.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    • but i will be redundant with my greatly appreciated thanks for your comments. and thanks again. i have some reading to begin too. the list has been growing little by little each week. i’ve recruited a few recently.

  4. Dear Rich,
    I enjoyed this ghastly tale. Fortunately the beast stayed away from the cat’s Kibbles & Bits or a rumble might have occurred in the kitchen. Thanks for another great story from a master storyteller.

  5. i thought there was gonna be some bloody cat fight lol ^^ but i do love the ending ^^ love the very detailed description of the cat as she prepares herself for battle ^^

    • A smart guy who has been critiquing my writing lately told me to change the balance from less dialogue to more physical action. So I am working on that. Thanks very much for reading.

  6. Phenomenal sir, I like the way you created the standoff, but didn’t elude to who the “beast” was until the end. Made it very stressful to start and cheery to finish. Keep it up!

  7. I talk so damn much I don’t think I could ever get something down to 100 words – great job.

    Also, can you call me “mister” when you thank me? I like to be different than all the other misses.

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