#fridayfictioneers via rochelle – 1/25

Every Wednesday Roughskin Wisoff-Fields posts a picture prompt to challenge writers to create a 100-word story or poem or anything that works for you.  After you post your work on your blog,  go back to her site and add a link to your post on her Friday Fictioneers post.  Place.  Page.

I’m going to try to keep up with this, as should you.  Give it a shot.  I prefer to stick to 100 words, but she doesn’t mind either way.  Not everyone has the time to sit and write, revise, edit, revise, edit, etc. until getting it down to 100 and telling everything you want to tell.

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Lunchtime in Florida

“Lookit the chest on the blue one!”

“Red bikini got perfect legs.”

“Legs?”

“Yeah.”

“Legs are okay, but I love a big rack.  Watch ‘em bounce when she runs to the water.  Nature’s built-in buoys.”

“You got issues.  Think about where those legs go.  That soft, round, fleshy-”

“You’re into butts?  I thought you meant something else.”

“Wanna get that soft spot.  Can’t wait to taste me some juicy-”

“Shhh.  Calm down.  She’s coming.”

Me calm down?”

“Dude, you’re scaring them.  You come on too strong.”

“Relax.  It’s SpringBreak.  They’re everywhere.  And I’m hungry.”

Two sharks lurked beyond the breakers…

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100 words

149 thoughts on “#fridayfictioneers via rochelle – 1/25

  1. We took similar inspiration this week, but you went for ‘comic’. At the beginning I though you’d gone for a slant that I was playing around with yesterday afternoon. Mine started in a similar fashion with two guys watching the girls and saying “When God was giving out bosoms, she must have misheard him and got in the line for zits”…. . But I couldn’t get it any further than that. :( Nice one Rich, made me grin. Thank you.

  2. That whole piece was so you, Rich. As for glasses (in the comment section), as Bill told our older daughter when she was wearing glasses, “Men make passes at girls who wear glasses.” True or not, it made her feel better.

    janet

  3. Well about the glasses in the comment section. Oh yeah men make passes at girls in glasses. We are a sexy bunch we are. :-)
    Now for the story, I really enjoyed it. I wasn’t sure at first if it was just boys talking. Then I read the last and laughed. Now that was good.

  4. Comic porn. I get it. At first I thought it was college porn ( you know like corn porn) and then when I learned it was the sharks talking I was a little embarrassed I thought it was porn. But THEN I read the exchange between you and MissFourEyes and am back to corn porn. ;)
    Fun post!

  5. Ha Ha. I am a fan of the Jaws movies and books by Peter Benchley, isn’t it? We have some of the original books. Those sounded like a couple of hungry great whites. Have you ever seen, “The Deep”? That was very good too.

      • yes, I’m sure. She did draw the attention with that scene. :) I forgot the name of the other leading character, who also played in, “Rich Man, Poor Man”, the blond, Nordic guy. Anyway, it was a suspenseful movie. When we first saw the first Jaws movie, husband and I and our oldest girl were down in Miami, Fla. on vacation visiting his parents and we went to see it then (without her, of course since she would never have gone into the water after that, and she learned how to swim too, on the gulf side of Florida while we visited there too). Anyway, it seemed all the more real watching it in Miami as we went to the beaches every day almost when down there.

      • if you’re ever in florida again near the ocean, try to get up high in a hotel and look down at the water. you’ll be surprised how many sharks you might see.

      • I have no doubt about that. My brother once went deep-sea fishing on an overnight fishing cruise boat and was so disappointed that he could not catch any big fish that swam in those waters. Maybe they were all eaten up by the sharks in those waters. :) He was able to get a nice large halibut though once up in the northwest coastal waters of Alaska near Juneau, and had it cut and processed so we could all enjoy some of it. It sure was good. I love fish, all kinds and all types (so far). Squid is not bad, but have not yet tasted Sushi. My daughter has and really liked it.

  6. Man, I loved the stop/start hush hush that was going on… I was thinking “geez that’s what I’d say!” but… I guess I’m not a shark then, am I? Rock on, I liked this… Funny as hell.

  7. Hahah – that’s a great one! I love the shark twist. I started wondering what was going on when he said wanna get that soft spot, but then it all makes sense whether they’re hungry sharks or hungry boys during spring break. Thanks for the laugh!

    • i tried to find a breed of shark that started with an R, and all i could find was roughskin, which is more of a nickname for a certain breed. thanks for reading.

  8. ‘Surprise Ending’ taken to the highest (or lowest) level!!! Whichever direction you want to see it, you did a great job of getting there. And you’re right about sharks and frats being synonymous.

  9. So…did the sharks get religion or did the nubile lovelies literally come for dinner? My sympathies are with the girls–that’s an awfully messy way to go. As for reading the comments and replies–wouldn’t miss them–they’re at least as interesting as the posts, and sometimes more so.

  10. Nice bait and switch, Rich. I wish the reveal could have been move subtle, but with 100 words and so much for these guys to say, I can definitely see why you did it this way

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