Friday Fictioneers – 1/30 – “The Gift”

I haven’t played with the Friday Fictioneers in a long time, but when i saw this picture – and when I saw who contributed it – something came to me quite quickly.

No long setups because if I need a long setup, then I haven’t done my job with 100 words.


on-on-offThe Gift

 

“No, Teddy,” said Mary, “Joey’s out with my parents.”

“But he said to come see the trains he got for Christmas,” Teddy whined.

“C’mon,” Mary’s arm extended, “I’ll show you.”

“But what about Joey?”

She pulled him in, door slammed.  Her body guided him to the stairs.

“Joey said the trains are running around the Christmas tree.”

“I know,” nearly whispering, “but you should see what I got this year.”

“Probably some stupid dolls?” Teddy said.  They reached her room.

“Trust me,” she pulled him in.  He stumbled.  The door closed.  “You’re gonna love ’em!”

Teddy would soon become Ted.


 

43 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – 1/30 – “The Gift”

  1. Good to see you back around these parts. You always were a master of brevity. It’s amazing how those last five words convey so much meaning, none of which would come across in Google Translate.
    -David

  2. Dear Brainsnorts or Rich, WOW – she is a naughty girl but she will be popular with the boys in school. I’m sure he will feel awkward for awhile around Joey – heck maybe he is a Joe now too. Nan 🙂

    • he might be “joe,” but hopefully not with mary’s help. though mary does seem on the naughty side, it could be attributed to human nature and natural instincts. either way, it was fun to write it. thanks for stopping by.

  3. Dear Rich,

    “I’ve got a brand new pair of roller skates, you’ve got a brand new key. I think that we should get together and try them on to see…”

    When I was a lad grown up in New Shrewsbury I had a friend who lived just down the road from Melanie, whose one hit wonder song came to mind when I read your perfect story.

    So nice to see your particular style here in the Friday Fictioneer’s mix.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    • yes sir, that’s what i was going for – mary had an awakening that went beyond the traditional gifts, and she wanted to share it with someone. thanks to ted, whose image of an old power cord made me think of days gone by. and thanks for the greeting.

    • that’s what i’m hoping for – something that you didn’t see coming but for which there were enough hints that come back to you when you realize what was actually happening. thanks for reading.

  4. Welcome back, stud. And what a one to come back with. Teddy and Ted made me think of, you know, the lacy Teddy. I don’t know if that was intended. Merry Christmas, Ted!

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