Every Wednesday Rachmaninoff Wisoff-Fields posts a picture prompt to challenge writers to create a 100-word story or poem or anything that works for you. After you post your work on your blog, go back to her site and add a link to your post on her Friday Fictioneers post. Place. Page.
I’m going to try to keep up with this, as should you. Give it a shot. I prefer to stick to 100 words, but she doesn’t mind either way. Not everyone has the time to sit and write, revise, edit, revise, edit, etc. until getting it down to 100 and telling everything you want to tell.
Moments before the 8pm show, tremors shook Karnagee Hall.
Tiny, “IT’S GONE!”
Dust rained in the basement as he stomped his feet.
The stagehand, “We’re looking, Tiny!”
The agent, “Get him a chair!”
The seamstress, “Get him a couch.”
First clarinet, “Please change my seat.”
The conductor, “Keep him quiet!”
The stagehand, “I’ll get tissues.”
The custodian, “I’ll get a mop.”
The seamstress, “Maybe a towel.”
The agent, “Call the producer!”
Tiny stomped harder.
The producer, “Call the carpenter!”
The mover trudged carefully, lugging an oaken cello.
The mover, “Found it!”
Tiny smiled, “My violin!”
This would have been a good one for me to have kept track of the revising because I had originally written ...said the agent and …said the stagehand after each line of dialogue. Then I realized I could get away with removing “said” from each line because we can tell that it’s being said. It’s dialogue. Then I shifted the attribution to be beginning, like a script. Like this:
Producer: Call the carpenter!
The problem there was that it did not give me the same visual impact without quotation marks, but I didn’t like having the quotes with the name and colon because it just isn’t the right format. By moving the quote after the title, it gave the dialogue more impact, which is what really drives this. For me, it felt like a nursery rhyme, which is kind of what I wanted.